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Do you see the sun? Tears in your eyes. Watching the kids run. Hearing the screams in your head. The buses turn from yellow to pale red. Every day. I know your eyes were open till 4. Waking at 6. Numbing for a fix. Gazing at helpless shoulders. Scarlet slits making life hellishly colder. Last year. Look through my phone. See those whores in my head. I just wanted to be alone. From bones holding such shallow tears. This was a river for all I ever feared. I hope you see the sun.
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Turn away, i'm just damaged goods.
Feel another, maybe it will feel right. Don't know what works, don't know faith. Maybe i'll dream of you and feel something pure. I don't know what pure is anymore. Maybe i'll dream of the wheel turning Spinning. Crashing. Asleep Where I wont be lost. @daydreamingphoenix You think you know them now.
Wait till them wolves come out. There’s no hunger like something primal. You need something raw. Ill give you something animal. This isn't a mind over matter it's a mind over time. A guide to life itself. No guile to be found. Id pay anything, blood, and money, soul and time. just to hear your skin come off again. As if this feeling had no end. @daydreamingPhoenix CSo recently I've been incredibly absent from this blog. This is mainly unintentional as i love to write and love to support it. This is mainly due to me taking two accelerated classes while working full time. This gives me very little free time but I intend to make up for it.
I will be posting more poetry posts and other various studies at least weekly. I also intend to start food blogs to expand my horizons and expose people to my love for food and skill as a cook in the Chester County area. Thank you for listening. Goodnight. This is a wholesome reflection on my time in English Composition I under professor Sabatino Mangini at Delaware County Community College.
To start off on a personal note, this was my very first class in college and hence has given me my first impressions. It was the class I was most excited for because I love to write and love to prove myself and be challenged by teachers of the literary field. This was honestly my most enjoyable class. while we started with an almost full room of students and by the end lost nearly half, I grew to experience some social connections and realized the potential that can be gained from starting a blog. I have developed my blog in a large amount of ways and hope to continue doing this on a somewhat regular basis so i can also build somewhat of an audience. I also found the professor to be three things: inspiring, entertaining and highly captivating. He seemed to have an excellent grasp on his class topic and many excellent innovative methods on teaching it. these methods all prove to be engaging and fun for the class even when it was night and sometimes lasted till 9:10pm. I was probably one of the only people happy with that fact but that is more of a reflection on my love for learning and writing. Anyhow Mr. Mangini provided great criticism and feed back on my work and kept his charisma ongoing throughout class which in turn kept me just as enthused as I needed to be even in assignments of the most boring topics. He did all this while under the stress of a concussion on top of whatever else was going on in his life and i find that fairly admirable. I found the work to be very engaging and innovative, especially the Life Choice Memoir. When I first wrote this assignment I hated both the work and the content I had created. The story I wrote was very unexplored and unvented for me so everything felt raw and everything felt like a migraine to write. As time went on and more revisions were made I grew more invested and wanted to open up more in this memoir. I don't usually dabble in my own life and this gave me more intuition to delve into myself and my life's experiences through my writing. The second formal assignment our research paper was equally captivating although more challenging because I don't normally delve into political topics. One of the ways I tried making this easier was by depoliticizing my topic and attempting to make it more moral. This helped me because my argument was easier to make emotional and not as boring to write (I find most political topics to be uninteresting.) I also learned the very boring requirements for citation so this was fairly useful even if I do end up getting a poor grade. I think one of the goals any professor should have is to make their student want to come back to class. I can say with absolute certainty that id love to have this class again and only wish it would last longer. I believe I am engaging in a practice that is both innovative and inspiring for me as a writer. It also can be challenging and pushes me to take leaps in my ability which can only be a good thing whether I do poorly or well. I also appreciated the ability to revise my assignments over and over to get the right grade and for some people this may be more urge to procrastinate but for me it only pushes me to progress and revise more, along with the need to manage my heavily busy schedule. This is my reflection for my Research paper on how America could improve its prisons. In this paper you will find reflection on various topics and information about my process writing the paper and my process later revising it.
Who did you work with to compose your research paper? Was this a good approach? -I honestly did not work with anyone on my research paper but did get some help on a sub topic with my Public Speaking teacher because I am doing a speech on a similar topic. What rhetorical mode and genre are you using? -In the paper I used modes of description, exposition and argumentation. I used description when I described certain parts of prison environments and developing locations like Bastoy and Gorgona prison. I used exposition when explaining statistics, providing base information about prisons and informing the audience with information from my numerous sources. I used argumentation throughout the essay when persuading my audience on the concepts presented in the essay. Argumentation was also key when needing to present my emotion and passion in an essay that would be somewhat boring without persuasive emotion. When did you write this project? Good approach? -I wrote it over three days in the span of a week. Numerous times throughout I had to add new sources and develop ideas. Due to this rush and inconsistency in concepts the essay may seem somewhat disjointed but overall I think it was a good approach because if I had stopped and then returned a bunch of times I would have felt even more disjointed and lost in my writing. Where did you write this project? Good approach? -I wrote this at home and in numerous cafes around Exton and Downingtown. Good approach although I wish I could do even more writing outside of home and in less busy hours. Why did you choose to write about your chosen topic? Good choice? -I cant quite relate to it much but I am passionate about how people feel toward others and how that impacts them in their own lives. Therefor I think it was a good topic for me because I feel criminals in America are treated harshly and with little forgiveness. I also thought it to be one of the mos emotional and powerful topics in the movie "Where to invade next". How did it feel to write this argument ("during, after, and since")? Do you have any "if only" moments that can help you revise the draft? -I felt great while writing this. I felt emotionally invested and am a little disappointed with my organization of certain topics. How will you revise your argument? -I will probably work on the organization alot in my second draft. My essay is sloppy and certain parts need more context and less emotion. This is a blog post about the music i enjoy listening to while I write both creatively and formally.
So when I'm writing I need focus and usually a calm but thrilling atmosphere to both inspire me in the moment and keep a constant consistent flow to my writing. What appeals to me most for this is blues rock, old school r&b, contemporary sound tracks or different forms of soft rock. It's overall a lot of tunes with gentle flows and melodies that bring some tranquil happiness to my dark mind. If I were to imagine my musical flow while i write i think it would be a waterfall of dark blue honey surrounded by Joshua trees, bright stars and animals cuddling around and about. I currently have a long playlist which i add to almost every day, i shuffle it around often but i think it has good value and quality when it comes to my writing and it could have value to you as well so feel free to check it out. Thank you for listening. have a good day. Moore, Micheal, et al. Where To Invade Next. Dog Eat Dog Films, 2016. Where to Invade Next is a documentary film from director Michael Moore which details ways America could "improve" its systems. In the documentary Where to Invade Next , Michael Moore explains how major systems in America could be improved from his point of view by visiting other countries with different or more progressive methods, learning about them and displaying their contrast through the film. Each country represents a different one of these systems that could be improved. While some overlap and some have failed histories which lead to what he shows as a successful future through how they operate. This relates to my paper because it brought form the main idea of the paper, the reform of American prisons to be more rehabilitating similar to that of other countries. Using this source I will provide a prime comparison of Norway to present how I would like to change the United State’s prisons. "Preface to 'What Is the State of the Prison System in the United States?'." Criminal Justice, edited by David Haugen and Susan Musser, Greenhaven Press, 2009. Opposing Viewpoints. Opposing Viewpoints In Context, http://link.galegroup.com.libdb.dccc.edu/apps/doc/EJ3010119169/OVIC?u=pa_de_ccc&sid=OVIC&xid=bf5d8b3d. Accessed 6 Apr. 2018. This is an article from a learning center with the goal of researching criminal justice, It summarizes in high detail the current state of prisons in the united States. Through thorough details it uses statistics to display the failings of the United States’s current prison system. It also uses credible accounts from professionals in the prison business to prove its points. Sometimes it focuses on a variety of topics like reinterment and private prisons. I can use this in my research paper because it provides factual information on the United States’s system. This is integral because i will need a source to use to provide comparison from the United States to other countries which differ from our systems. "Nicer prisons are a benefit to everyone." Age [Melbourne, Australia], 6 Oct. 2016, p. 19. Opposing Viewpoints In Context, http://link.galegroup.com.libdb.dccc.edu/apps/doc/A465575197/OVIC?u=pa_de_ccc&sid=OVIC&xid=84c5620f. Accessed 6 Apr. 2018. This is an article written by a journalist from Australia which ironically enough started as a continent where many other European countries sent their convicted felons. It provides an insightful look and comparison between old Victorian prisons, prisons in the United States and prisons in countries like Norway. The article provides statistics for different prisons. It also has insight on the particular architecture of different varying prisons and how that can affect the recidement rate. This article is useful because it supports the argument I am trying to make. It also provides unique details from an Australian perspective. The article covers a variety of topics. It has statistics about two topics i am focusing on in my essay. Bilefsky, Dan. "A Space Issue in Dutch Prisons: Too Many Empty Cells." New York Times, Feb 12, 2017, ProQuest, http://libdb.dccc.edu/login?url=https://search-proquest-com.libdb.dccc.edu/docview/1867275063?accountid=10459. The article's main focus is on how the dutch have a lack of prisoners filling their prisons and how this was accomplished. In the article, the writer delves into how a lack of people in prison is helping the country. It also makes a point to include how the country has made these former prisons more useful by restructuring them into asylums and hotels. This is useful for me because eventually in the essay I will need to present an argument on how people can be more productive in society if they aren't stuck in a cycle of going back and forth between prison. Dreisinger, Baz. Incarceration Nations: a Journey to Justice in Prisons around the World. ser. 159051727X, 9781590517277, Other Press, LLC, 2016, 2017. This is a first hand account from a journalist who went to various countries prisons to find out what would make the most justified and humanly ideal prison. The journalist does not hold back her bias in the account but it is another addition to the main source of “Where to invade next” because she visits prison island in Norway which is the same place that Michael Moore visited in his documentary She asks key questions that are not as easy to detail in a movie and therefore in some ways this journal has more detail than the movie because the reporter can go into detail with hundreds of words. While someone might find this to be a redundant source I think it’s helpful to my essay. This is helpful because it will provide an alternate opinion and perspective on a location where different types of prison are located. It also offers more insight that the Moore’s documentary did not focus on. "THE COSTLY U.S. PRISON SYSTEM Too Costly in Dollars, National Prestige, and Lives." Kirkus Reviews, vol. 86, no. 3, 2/1/2018, p. 419. EBSCOhost, search.ebscohost.com.libdb.dccc.edu/login.aspx?direct=true&db=f5h&AN=127646734&site=ehost-live. This is a very short but extremely statistically detailed review of a book about the expenses of the United States prison system. The review holds an abundance of statistical and integral factual data. The review is only of use to my essay to help provide valuable but boring information on the topic. Shammas, Victor Lund. The Pains of Freedom: Assessing the Ambiguity of Scandinavian Penal Exceptionalism on Norway’s Prison Island . Vol 16, Issue 1, pp. 104 - 123, University of OSLO, 2014. This is a well founded book about open prisons, especially the one featured in norway and focuses on how they punish prisoners in a different way than that of a normal prison or one in the United States. The author of this book provides insight into the innovative ways open prisons punish prisoners which are more on a mental capacity. This still implements a rehabilitative system and the author proves that with credible logic and reason. The book also explains somewhat why normal punishment is wrong and analyzes prison systems in depth. This will be useful in my essay because it provides more reason and logic to the opposing side. It is also very in detail and in depth on each topic it discusses. Mastrobuoni, Giovanni, and Daniele Terlizzese. Rehabilitation and Recidivism: Evidence from an Open Prison. Working Paper, 2014. This is a essay written from a duo of professionals doing studies on Bollate prison in Italy, Its effects on the population and the connections between open prisons, recidivism and employment. The essay goes into detail on all parts of the Bollate prison with no bias. It also consists of many statistics that are relevant to the topics at hand. The essay literally has reports of a developed formula on some of the prisons concepts. In relation to my essay this source provides a viewpoint on an open prison from a country other than Norway. It also has a good amount of detail on a variety of topics. It is from a credible source and can offer written in depth detail from inside Italy’s only open prison. Cullen F.T., Gendreau P. (1989) The Effectiveness of Correctional Rehabilitation. In: Goodstein L., MacKenzie D.L. (eds) The American Prison. Law, Society and Policy, vol 4. Springer, Boston, MA Squires, Nick. “Italy's Answer to Alcatraz, the Island Vineyard Where Inmates Are Taught the Secrets of Winemaking.” The Telegraph, Telegraph Media Group, 22 June 2015, www.telegraph.co.uk/news/worldnews/europe/italy/11690308/Italys-answer-to-Alcatraz-the-island-vineyard-where-inmates-are-taught-the-secrets-of-winemaking.html. Dreisinger, Baz. “A ‘Message in a Bottle’ From Italy: Talking Prisons, Wine & Justice with Lamberto Frescobaldi.” Forbes, Forbes Magazine, 12 July 2017, www.forbes.com/sites/bazdreisinger/2017/07/12/a-message-in-a-bottle-from-italy-talking-prisons-wine-justice-with-lamberto-frescobaldi/#211735f63b83.
This is an honest post about my writing process. I plan to update this occasionally with no set routine.
Currently my favorite place to write is a local cafe or place of frequently purchased coffee or food. Sadly those are rather inconvenient for me as distance goes so i dont often have the opportunity to go to one of them unless on my day off which is about once a week. If I cannot go to one of these locations then i prefer my kitchen due to the frequent movement outside my large window and being in bed keeps me in a state of non-prosperous thought. I typically drink tea or water while i write and love to write while eating food. I do not know why but it seems to make me happy and focused. My parents often wonder why I dont like to do written work at home. To that I would say i feel trapped, bored and too grey. I need some form of movement, action, life. Now of course id hate the loud noise of a mall or any busy location but anywhere where i can see or feel the world moving helps. Heck if parks had outlets for laptops I would feel overjoyed to do my work in such a peaceful but lively setting. Due to my need for movement I often prefer to listen to music while I work. This music usually consists of soulful tracks from the early days of rock and blues but can also have various calming sorts of alternate rock and famous or unique sound tracks. I also write in a hurry in a sometimes unorganized fashion, which is odd because of my need for organization in the workplace and in my car. Sometimes I need to write in this manner simply since I have a lack of time in life due to working daily. Overall I enjoy my writing but sometimes when uninspired i feel a cloud of depression hit the paper that im writing which causes me to become sluggish. Id say this is alike to "writer's block" although i would call it more like pushing a "writer's wall". But I always try try again to overcome this wall. Hope you enjoy my writing maybe you can learn from my current process to overcome your problems. Ill be here if you have questions. Thank you for listening.
Write an introduction that provides the focus of your blog post, a link to Where to Invade Next , and a link to blog post #9 (Summary of Where to Invade Next). This blog is a more opinionated reflection of the film Where to Invade Next directed by Michael Moore than the prior blog where I analyzed the film and gave evidence to support Moore's persuasive processes. In this blog I will construct an argument based on these problem based topics for America's systems. This connects to Moore's documentary because I will be using it's content as examples for each topic and convey my opinion on the topic through my opinion on the documentary's content. Topic: Treatment of labor-force and work-place in America. Research question: How should America treat it's work-force? Argument: I think the most relatable phrase i could put in this response is "I hate my boss." Almost everyone I have ever known has said that to me at some point and i'm very certain we have all had the experience in life whether it be a part time job or full time of hating a job only due to the management. It's not only common but also has serious implications in the work place. For example one of my coworkers was recently fired on a new boss's 3rd day of work simply for raising a valid but opposing question. In the documentary by Michael Moore, The first country shown is Italy. In this country he focuses on two topics in regards to how the workforce is treated. The one I like to focus on is the relationship between the bosses in companies and the subordinates. In this relationship the bosses display love and care toward their workers because they want their companies to run smoothly where everyone is happy. There generally seems to be a happiness to the jobs displayed. This is made credible when Moore interviews both the bosses and the coworkers. I know for my own sake I could never imagine a job in America where the boss says "everyone is generally supposed to be happy and this job is supposed to fuel that". Why cant more jobs in America be that way and fuel the happiness of everyone involved. |
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