This is my reflection for my Research paper on how America could improve its prisons. In this paper you will find reflection on various topics and information about my process writing the paper and my process later revising it.
Who did you work with to compose your research paper? Was this a good approach? -I honestly did not work with anyone on my research paper but did get some help on a sub topic with my Public Speaking teacher because I am doing a speech on a similar topic. What rhetorical mode and genre are you using? -In the paper I used modes of description, exposition and argumentation. I used description when I described certain parts of prison environments and developing locations like Bastoy and Gorgona prison. I used exposition when explaining statistics, providing base information about prisons and informing the audience with information from my numerous sources. I used argumentation throughout the essay when persuading my audience on the concepts presented in the essay. Argumentation was also key when needing to present my emotion and passion in an essay that would be somewhat boring without persuasive emotion. When did you write this project? Good approach? -I wrote it over three days in the span of a week. Numerous times throughout I had to add new sources and develop ideas. Due to this rush and inconsistency in concepts the essay may seem somewhat disjointed but overall I think it was a good approach because if I had stopped and then returned a bunch of times I would have felt even more disjointed and lost in my writing. Where did you write this project? Good approach? -I wrote this at home and in numerous cafes around Exton and Downingtown. Good approach although I wish I could do even more writing outside of home and in less busy hours. Why did you choose to write about your chosen topic? Good choice? -I cant quite relate to it much but I am passionate about how people feel toward others and how that impacts them in their own lives. Therefor I think it was a good topic for me because I feel criminals in America are treated harshly and with little forgiveness. I also thought it to be one of the mos emotional and powerful topics in the movie "Where to invade next". How did it feel to write this argument ("during, after, and since")? Do you have any "if only" moments that can help you revise the draft? -I felt great while writing this. I felt emotionally invested and am a little disappointed with my organization of certain topics. How will you revise your argument? -I will probably work on the organization alot in my second draft. My essay is sloppy and certain parts need more context and less emotion.
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Moore, Micheal, et al. Where To Invade Next. Dog Eat Dog Films, 2016. Where to Invade Next is a documentary film from director Michael Moore which details ways America could "improve" its systems. In the documentary Where to Invade Next , Michael Moore explains how major systems in America could be improved from his point of view by visiting other countries with different or more progressive methods, learning about them and displaying their contrast through the film. Each country represents a different one of these systems that could be improved. While some overlap and some have failed histories which lead to what he shows as a successful future through how they operate. This relates to my paper because it brought form the main idea of the paper, the reform of American prisons to be more rehabilitating similar to that of other countries. Using this source I will provide a prime comparison of Norway to present how I would like to change the United State’s prisons. "Preface to 'What Is the State of the Prison System in the United States?'." Criminal Justice, edited by David Haugen and Susan Musser, Greenhaven Press, 2009. Opposing Viewpoints. Opposing Viewpoints In Context, http://link.galegroup.com.libdb.dccc.edu/apps/doc/EJ3010119169/OVIC?u=pa_de_ccc&sid=OVIC&xid=bf5d8b3d. Accessed 6 Apr. 2018. This is an article from a learning center with the goal of researching criminal justice, It summarizes in high detail the current state of prisons in the united States. Through thorough details it uses statistics to display the failings of the United States’s current prison system. It also uses credible accounts from professionals in the prison business to prove its points. Sometimes it focuses on a variety of topics like reinterment and private prisons. I can use this in my research paper because it provides factual information on the United States’s system. This is integral because i will need a source to use to provide comparison from the United States to other countries which differ from our systems. "Nicer prisons are a benefit to everyone." Age [Melbourne, Australia], 6 Oct. 2016, p. 19. Opposing Viewpoints In Context, http://link.galegroup.com.libdb.dccc.edu/apps/doc/A465575197/OVIC?u=pa_de_ccc&sid=OVIC&xid=84c5620f. Accessed 6 Apr. 2018. This is an article written by a journalist from Australia which ironically enough started as a continent where many other European countries sent their convicted felons. It provides an insightful look and comparison between old Victorian prisons, prisons in the United States and prisons in countries like Norway. The article provides statistics for different prisons. It also has insight on the particular architecture of different varying prisons and how that can affect the recidement rate. This article is useful because it supports the argument I am trying to make. It also provides unique details from an Australian perspective. The article covers a variety of topics. It has statistics about two topics i am focusing on in my essay. Bilefsky, Dan. "A Space Issue in Dutch Prisons: Too Many Empty Cells." New York Times, Feb 12, 2017, ProQuest, http://libdb.dccc.edu/login?url=https://search-proquest-com.libdb.dccc.edu/docview/1867275063?accountid=10459. The article's main focus is on how the dutch have a lack of prisoners filling their prisons and how this was accomplished. In the article, the writer delves into how a lack of people in prison is helping the country. It also makes a point to include how the country has made these former prisons more useful by restructuring them into asylums and hotels. This is useful for me because eventually in the essay I will need to present an argument on how people can be more productive in society if they aren't stuck in a cycle of going back and forth between prison. Dreisinger, Baz. Incarceration Nations: a Journey to Justice in Prisons around the World. ser. 159051727X, 9781590517277, Other Press, LLC, 2016, 2017. This is a first hand account from a journalist who went to various countries prisons to find out what would make the most justified and humanly ideal prison. The journalist does not hold back her bias in the account but it is another addition to the main source of “Where to invade next” because she visits prison island in Norway which is the same place that Michael Moore visited in his documentary She asks key questions that are not as easy to detail in a movie and therefore in some ways this journal has more detail than the movie because the reporter can go into detail with hundreds of words. While someone might find this to be a redundant source I think it’s helpful to my essay. This is helpful because it will provide an alternate opinion and perspective on a location where different types of prison are located. It also offers more insight that the Moore’s documentary did not focus on. "THE COSTLY U.S. PRISON SYSTEM Too Costly in Dollars, National Prestige, and Lives." Kirkus Reviews, vol. 86, no. 3, 2/1/2018, p. 419. EBSCOhost, search.ebscohost.com.libdb.dccc.edu/login.aspx?direct=true&db=f5h&AN=127646734&site=ehost-live. This is a very short but extremely statistically detailed review of a book about the expenses of the United States prison system. The review holds an abundance of statistical and integral factual data. The review is only of use to my essay to help provide valuable but boring information on the topic. Shammas, Victor Lund. The Pains of Freedom: Assessing the Ambiguity of Scandinavian Penal Exceptionalism on Norway’s Prison Island . Vol 16, Issue 1, pp. 104 - 123, University of OSLO, 2014. This is a well founded book about open prisons, especially the one featured in norway and focuses on how they punish prisoners in a different way than that of a normal prison or one in the United States. The author of this book provides insight into the innovative ways open prisons punish prisoners which are more on a mental capacity. This still implements a rehabilitative system and the author proves that with credible logic and reason. The book also explains somewhat why normal punishment is wrong and analyzes prison systems in depth. This will be useful in my essay because it provides more reason and logic to the opposing side. It is also very in detail and in depth on each topic it discusses. Mastrobuoni, Giovanni, and Daniele Terlizzese. Rehabilitation and Recidivism: Evidence from an Open Prison. Working Paper, 2014. This is a essay written from a duo of professionals doing studies on Bollate prison in Italy, Its effects on the population and the connections between open prisons, recidivism and employment. The essay goes into detail on all parts of the Bollate prison with no bias. It also consists of many statistics that are relevant to the topics at hand. The essay literally has reports of a developed formula on some of the prisons concepts. In relation to my essay this source provides a viewpoint on an open prison from a country other than Norway. It also has a good amount of detail on a variety of topics. It is from a credible source and can offer written in depth detail from inside Italy’s only open prison. Cullen F.T., Gendreau P. (1989) The Effectiveness of Correctional Rehabilitation. In: Goodstein L., MacKenzie D.L. (eds) The American Prison. Law, Society and Policy, vol 4. Springer, Boston, MA Squires, Nick. “Italy's Answer to Alcatraz, the Island Vineyard Where Inmates Are Taught the Secrets of Winemaking.” The Telegraph, Telegraph Media Group, 22 June 2015, www.telegraph.co.uk/news/worldnews/europe/italy/11690308/Italys-answer-to-Alcatraz-the-island-vineyard-where-inmates-are-taught-the-secrets-of-winemaking.html. Dreisinger, Baz. “A ‘Message in a Bottle’ From Italy: Talking Prisons, Wine & Justice with Lamberto Frescobaldi.” Forbes, Forbes Magazine, 12 July 2017, www.forbes.com/sites/bazdreisinger/2017/07/12/a-message-in-a-bottle-from-italy-talking-prisons-wine-justice-with-lamberto-frescobaldi/#211735f63b83.
Write an introduction that provides the focus of your blog post, a link to Where to Invade Next , and a link to blog post #9 (Summary of Where to Invade Next). This blog is a more opinionated reflection of the film Where to Invade Next directed by Michael Moore than the prior blog where I analyzed the film and gave evidence to support Moore's persuasive processes. In this blog I will construct an argument based on these problem based topics for America's systems. This connects to Moore's documentary because I will be using it's content as examples for each topic and convey my opinion on the topic through my opinion on the documentary's content. Topic: Treatment of labor-force and work-place in America. Research question: How should America treat it's work-force? Argument: I think the most relatable phrase i could put in this response is "I hate my boss." Almost everyone I have ever known has said that to me at some point and i'm very certain we have all had the experience in life whether it be a part time job or full time of hating a job only due to the management. It's not only common but also has serious implications in the work place. For example one of my coworkers was recently fired on a new boss's 3rd day of work simply for raising a valid but opposing question. In the documentary by Michael Moore, The first country shown is Italy. In this country he focuses on two topics in regards to how the workforce is treated. The one I like to focus on is the relationship between the bosses in companies and the subordinates. In this relationship the bosses display love and care toward their workers because they want their companies to run smoothly where everyone is happy. There generally seems to be a happiness to the jobs displayed. This is made credible when Moore interviews both the bosses and the coworkers. I know for my own sake I could never imagine a job in America where the boss says "everyone is generally supposed to be happy and this job is supposed to fuel that". Why cant more jobs in America be that way and fuel the happiness of everyone involved. This blog is a analysis of Where to Invade Next, a documentary film from director Michael Moore which details ways America could "improve" its systems involving topics like health care, work place treatment, imprisonment, police force, education and many more. In the documentary Where to Invade Next , Michael Moore explains how major systems in America could be improved from his point of view by visiting other countries with different or more progressive methods, learning about them and displaying their contrast through the film. Each country represents a different one of these systems that could be improved. While some overlap and some have failed histories which lead to what he shows as a successful future through how they operate. Overall through Moore's contrast he seems highly critical of the way America operates but evidently throughout the film he replays the fact that he loves his home country and just believes it to be flawed with plenty of room for improvement.
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